I had to annotate one page from Dillard's story and explain why I made the annotations I did. I chose page 82 to annotate.
I underlined this sentence: "We smashed through a gap in another hedge and entered a scruffy backyard’ – because I like the vivid description. I also circled the word 'smashed' because the word is imitating the sound it represents.
I also underlined: "We kept running, block after block; we kept improvising, backyard after backyard, running a frantic course…’ – I like this for two reasons. The first is because it seems to add to the tension the author has been building, and the second reason is the way it’s written. The ‘block after block’ combined with the ‘backyard after backyard’ have a rhythm that I like.
I circled the words 'Impelled' and 'compelled' - to be impelled is to be driven (but not forced) forward, usually because one is convinced of the need for action. To be compelled is to be forced into action by a compelling force. I like how the situation was concisely described by these two words.
The last one I highlighted and it is quite long:
"…this ordinary adult knew what I thought only children who trained at football knew: that you have to fling yourself at what you’re doing, you have to point yourself, forget yourself, aim, dive…’ – I highlighted this one, again for two reasons. The first is that it ties in with what the little girl was saying at the beginning to the story during football practice, about how the fate of the team and the score you get depends on your courage and your concentration. The second reason is just because I thought it was rather moving.
I really like how you chose to annotate this page. I thought back to Reading 90 when we had to annotate almost everything we read and you used several of the techniques we learned than such as the highlighting, underlining, and circling important things that stand out. I think that you did a great job, especially with your explanations of why you felt you needed to annotate that! Good Job!
ReplyDeleteLainey- All good ones to point out. Annotation is right on the money without the words or feelings the story wouldn't feel or flow the same way. I like how you described the action "smashed" it did give the impression of sound at that moment as you read the story. Good use of the skills.
ReplyDeleteLainey I really liked reading your summary of this section in the essay. Dillard used such amazing description I like that you circled some descriptions that you could visualize or hear. Your choices for the examples you chose were well selected and your reasons were good and precise.
ReplyDeleteLainey you did a nice job annotating and seemed to enjoy paraphrasing what you had selected.
ReplyDeleteI think you did a really good job at highlighting some really great points in the story. You clearly picked out things that should grab the readers attention. You also brought attention to the end of the story referring back to the beginning of the story about football. Great job!!
ReplyDeleteYou did admirable work here. This is a very thorough response to the assignment. I particularly like how you explained why you annotated what you did.
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