As you can see, smoking can have very serious affects on not only the smoker, but those around them as well. People whom smoke can suffer very serious health related risks such as lung cancer, emphysema and other heart related diseases while those who do not smoke, but are around smokers can suffer second hand smoke, asthma and other breathing problems. All of these health related risks can be very mild yet could also be very deadly for some individuals.
I think that people smoke for many reasons, however no one really looks at all the health related risks, nor do they see that if they were to quit today, how much of a better chance they may have for decreasing the health related risks. I think that talking about smoking, and the significant life changes people suffer from smoking are important for people to see because it shows that these health related risks are not just used to scare people into quit smoking, they are real life stories which make people truly think about smoking.
I decided to write about smoking because there is a good portion of my family who smokes, including me at one time. I quit a little over a year ago, and I have never felt better. Its amazing how much better I can breathe and how much easier it is to do certain activities that I struggled with before. I have tried to get other family members to quit, however have failed this far. No smoker can quit if they truly don't want to. I think that smoking needs to quit because of all the health related risks for those who do not smoke. My nephew is 2 years old and suffers very badly from asthma due to the second hand smoke. The first year of his life, no one smoked around him, but when he got a little bit bigger people began to smoke around him, and now he has to take medicine including nebulizers and inhalers almost every day and its very sad to me that he is only 2 and is going to suffer these health related risks for the rest of his life because of the people who smoked around him. Second hand smoke is sometimes more dangerous for people than it is for the actual smoker.
As you can see, health related risks in not only the smoker but those around them also can have serious affects on a person. I think that smokers should continue to try to quit even if its not for there own health, but those poor people around them who are also suffering the consequences.
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I really liked the way you summarized everything in the first section. It was very succinct and went over the main points in your previous 'intro and body' paragraph. I really like this subject and I know exactly how you feel. Quitting is such an important thing to do, not just for yourself but for everyone around you. Everyday is still a battle for me...sometimes I want to snatch a cigarette out of a strangers hand and run for the hills with it ha! Quitting is so worth it though, and even though it's a battle it's a battle that's worthwhile. I hope you eventually manage to persuade your family to follow in your footsteps :)
ReplyDeleteAssignment 1.11: Writing a Conclusion - Proceeding with the assignment on my own and I hope I am posting this on the right thread:
ReplyDeleteJust for a moment take a deep breath of fresh clean air. Fill your entire lungs with the luxurious air that we breathe. It's our life, you know. Just as water is.
We have seen the damage that cigarette smoking has done throughout past generations. It has cost millions in lost productivity through sick leave and actually people taking more breaks at work to go outside and light up because they are so addicted to the tobacco and other additives that the tobacco companys use.
Of course, way back when, many workers were allowed to smoke on the job, at their desks, and in the break rooms. I still remember those days. I even remember being able to smoke in hospital rooms, after delivering babies! I still wonder why healthcare workers stand outside their facilities and smoke.
Is this the last generation to smoke; will the next generation wise up? I can only say that cancer is at an all time high and the research of second hand smoke plays an important part in at least stopping some of the new cases that could occur in the coming decades.
There are many people that will not even date a smoker. Cigarette smoke hangs on your clothing, hair and skin. It yellows your nails and teeth. It's really unattractive which is so ironic because it was displayed with such elegance when Lucille Ball lit up on television back in the 50's. It was portrayed so glamorous. I still remember commercials on t.v. for cigarettes. Those commercials were banned many years ago.
So with the current prices rising for a pack of cigarettes and the cancers rising, I'm thinking that we are ensuring that some of our youth will not even pick up their first cigarette to try, you know, just to be cool. Just as I did all those years ago. I quit cold turkey over 20 years ago, as they say. The smoking effects are now 100 percent gone from my body and organs. I now know how precious lungs are and their capacity to carry you as you run 2 miles a day. Our bodies are temples and should be treated with respect by us, as caretakers.
This conclusion was very well written and included all the necessary elements a conclusion needs to have. I like the clincher of making it clear to others it not only affects themselves but others around them. Smoking is something I am sure everyone can relate to because most of us are or know someone who is a smoker.
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ReplyDeleteA well done conclusion, and yes that is sad that a 2 year old has to suffer with Asthma. Its hard when their that young. They do not like the mask required. I dislike the fact that people use the roadways to put out their butts. My husband actually had someone get a ticket for empting their ash tray onto his vechile as they drove down the highway. That cause $400 in damage to the front end to our truck. The State Trooper had no problem giving that ticket. People who smoke are not only risking their own health by smoking and others who either walk behind, or through the smokey barrier they leave behind. The tar sticks to your mucus membranes, skin, hair, clothing, and yes your teeth. Its gross people. Outside is fresh air please don't add more chemicals to it. Again good points made all around. Thank you for posting.
Ricky- Your conclusion sounded more of an essay itself. Don't get me wrong, it was wonderfully written, but it could have done without some of your details. I would have liked to seen a "clincher" at the end. If you re-read the handout for a successful conclusion, it states that it needs to end like the beginning of your intro. With something that makes it stick in your reader's minds.
ReplyDeleteI agree very strongly with BJCTS4 (who are you, anyway? please let me know). My concern with both Ricki and Sara's posts is that they both seem more like whole essays instead of conclusions. All you needed to write here was one paragraph, about 6-8 sentences in length, that met the conclusion criteria that I discussed in the lecture. While what Ricki and Sara typed does have some of that information, it's hard to tell where the conclusion begins and the essay ends.
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